Fan Fiction Edits

I'm working on a potential edit of Robocop 2 that fixes some problems I had with it:

1. Very slow to get going - the first third of the movie branched out in many directions that didn't necessarily go anywhere. Some have been removed and some shortened.
2. Hob, the kid. I didn't like the way the character was written and directed. He barely features in the movie now until a few minutes much later on.
3. The OCP boardroom meetings and general waffle from some of the characters has been trimmed, especially Dr. Faxx. It was badly edited and a lot of exposition about Nuke and the Robocop 2 expenses are repeated too much.
4. When Murphy has his directives messed up by Dr Faxx, instead of going on patrol with Lewis and acting silly, once he begins to look odd in the precinct, Linda Garcia takes him for examination immediately.
5. Badly delivered lines have been mostly removed.
6. Rearranged some scenes to improve continuity and flow.

The edit is shaping up to be 30 minutes shorter (1 hour 30 minutes) instead of 1 hour 57 minutes.

Here's an example of the arcade scene with the kid removed: https://files.catbox.moe/42267g.mp4 Here's the original for comparison, where the kid was fairly central: https://inv.nadeko.net/watch?v=v4HLw7deOo0

I'm curious about your thoughts!