This is terrible, I can see that you're going for "reversal of roles" as a theme with the cookie crumbling you, but you're making it very difficult for us, the audience, to understand that symbology and follow along. Instead of that, I would suggest that you write it so that the cigarette turns into a person, rolls up MAN 2 and smokes him, followed by the gun turning into another person, cocking the cigarette which has smoked MAN 2 and then transforming again into MAN 2. That would make the scene much more readable.

[–] happybadger@hexbear.net 6 points 2 weeks ago (1 children)

MAN 2's gimmick is that he smokes an entire cigarette before every kill, leaving the audience at a point of dramatic climax as they wait ten minutes for him to finish each joke before he shoots the criminal in the head.

[–] Leon_Grotsky@hexbear.net 2 points 2 weeks ago* (last edited 2 weeks ago) (1 children)

If that's the case, may I suggest that they also roll their own cigarettes and likes to have an amicable conversation with the victim to throw them off guard a little bit while doing it - they're rolling that cigarette up until they go to lick the paper and then suddenly they're giving a Kubrick stare to signify they have reached the peak of their derangement!

[–] happybadger@hexbear.net 3 points 2 weeks ago (1 children)

That's the Happybadger Stare actually. In this movie I zoom in on his face staring into the camera to signify that he reached the peak of his derangement, that being each 10 minute~ cigarette sequence.

[–] Leon_Grotsky@hexbear.net 3 points 2 weeks ago

trump-kubrick-stare I love it

but maybe someone should send Mr. Kubrick an email and tell him to stop stealing trade secrets from the DPRS film industry !! soviet-huff